Jasmine Hart

Please excuse this, and correct me if I make any mistakes. Pippa I awoke early, with unfarmiliar strains of excitement bubbeling around the pit of my stomach. Unable to just ...

Yay, now I know what people mean by emo poetry! Ok, Snoink and Claudette, as always, make good points. Reading poetry will help you. I'd suggest running this through the ...

I apologise for my many questions, but I just want to make sure that I get this right before I post. Does Pippa have to be apprenticed to an existing ...

I could have sworn I posted here, but apparently not!Lol. I love "The Little Mermaid", "The Hunchback of Notredame", and "Aladdin". Ya, I agree that "Poor Unfortunate Souls" rocks.

Thanks guys.Em, red I think. I think she'd kinda like black eventually, but she's not going to admit to this, not yet anyway. If she earns her red robes, could ...

I'll probably be slaughtered for this, but I reckon most writers have issues. If they didn't, they probably wouldn't be able to write very well. I wasn't too keen on ...

Ya, Claudette is right. I did work experience in Poetry Ireland two years ago and they told me about these poetry scams, where, like Claudette says, you're told you've won ...

Could I please join this as a novice? There don't seem to be any of them yet... If not, disregard my bio! Name:Pippa Phillips Race:Human Age:14 (Let me know if ...

Overall I enjoyed this and felt that it was well written. For the first stanza, I'd suggest saying "in this journey" instead of "of". Maybe try "partaking in this journey" ...

This was nice, and the enjambment worked well. Stanzas would be nice, but I also quite like it this way. I agree wuith Liz about the cliches; flames darkness, flight ...

Ya, it varies with me too! I tend to work more on goals than hours. Like, three poems today, 20000 words today, write until it's done kinda thing.

Ya, writingluver, Chapter rocks! It's helping me write my book and it's so helpful when you get stuck! Exercises at the end of every chapter like the last one, and ...

This is really good. I love your stuff.I know this isn't helpful, but I really can't find anything that I would change about this. Your imagery, as always, is fresh, ...

As Lu says, this isn't overly it's own right, there really isn't anything wrong with this. I'd change the last line, as "all" and "saw" do not rhyme, thus your ...

Thanks Kit. I'm looking forward to it! Though I think I may need to skim over some of the last one first to refresh my memory...